Town (Chapter 3, Story 1)
The receptionist smiled at Kella as she walked past the front desk. "Would you like me to make an appointment for next week, Hon?" she asked. "No, thanks," Kella replied, "I'm busy." "Well how about the next week?" The receptionist raised an eyebrow at Kella. "I have to check my calendar," Kella replied, turning away from the desk. "I'll let you know soon." Kella breathed a sigh of relief when she finally exited the building. The warm rays of the afternoon sun caressed her face, and Kella could hear birds chirping and a dog barking somewhere in the distance. At one time, Kella had despised living in this small town. She hated how everyone knew her name--and her business--without ever formally meeting her. She hated the regularity of the town, how it never seemed to change, and how everyone living there had the same ideas about everything. But the town had grown on her, and now she couldn't imagine being without its quiet tree-lined streets and old-fashioned buildings.
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Hey Stephany! I really like your story.
Hello Stephany! This is a fantastic story and I can't wait for the next entries. It drew me in right away. In the "What's This About?" section of the website I suggest you leave us (the readers) with more questions about Kella's father. As it stands, he sounds like a "good" guy whereas the first chapter left me thinking he was a snake. The last chapter had a few typos such as "too" rather than "to" and I believe "hon" should be capitalized since Kella is being addressed with that name. Change "The hated how..." to "She hated how..." Please don't let my comments crush your enthusiasm because even if you didn't make these changes, the story is still excellent.
Eagerly awaiting the next installment!!!
Kittye
Michelle-Thank you so much, I'm glad you like the story and hope you'll help me make it better. :)
Ms. Kittye-Thank you so much for your critiques. They are highly appreciated. I will make those changes right away! :)
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